I read ‘The Storm.’ Four children appear in this story. Wilf, Wilma, Biff and Chip, they are really good friends. And they have a tree house on the premises of Biff and Chip’s house.
One day, they went to their tree house to play. It was really messy and broken the door and so on. So they started to fix and clean with Biff and Chip’s father. They decided how to divide up the parts among us. Father mended the roof, Biff and Wilma mended the door using the screwdriver, and Chip and Wilf painted the door and the walls each other. Cleaning and fixing had finished, and then they bring the stuffs and something to eat. They held a party in the comfortable tree house. At that night, there was a large scale storm in the town. It has never stopped for a long time even time went by. Four children were worried about their tree house whether it was blown by this big storm. After the large scale storm passed away, Biff and Chip went and saw the tree house with their dog Floppy. Unfortunately, the tree was blown by the storm, the tree house, too. Suddenly, Floppy barked and found something at the place what the tree was planted. It was a box and they found a key inside.
I can not understand a key which how to use it and a box. But Chip satisfied to get the box. I want to build their new tree house again!! (252 words)
Tuesday, January 12, 2010
BR6:＊I WiSH＊
I read ‘I WiSH’. The main characters are three boys. Their each names are Pele, Ron and pete. They always hang out together.
One day, Pele complained about school. ‘I hate school! I hate reading!’ When other two boys heard that they agreed about it. They started to talk about hate of school, for example, reading the books, writing the stories and so on. Finally, they said ‘I am sick of being a slave,’ Dudes, school is like a bad smell…’ They seem really do not like school. Then, three boys planed to run away from a school to the Pacific Ocean by the boat for their holidays. After few weeks, they left their town and trip to get their freedom. Then they arrived at an uninhabited island. Pele, Ron and Pete were really glad to it and enjoyed their freedom, because they do not need to writing, reading and studying. They enjoyed the freedom very much! But, they started to get tired of their freedom as it was enough for them. Suddenly, they want to quite their freedom lives and found certain bottle. Pele caught it and to get open it by himself. It was really hard to open. He gripped the cork tightly and pulled and pulled … Suddenly, three boys saw a giant genie standing over them in a cloud of smoke. He said ‘Thank you!’ because opening the bottle connected with saving a giant genie. According to his telling, he can get come true three boy’s wish. As three boys grew tired of living there, they said ‘We want to go back to school and studying!!’ And then, a giant genie got come true their wish.
Sometimes, I think that want to get a freedom. But in my opinion, too much freedom and our free time are not necessary for us. Moderate amount of them is the best for us!! I could reconfirm about it. (319 words)
One day, Pele complained about school. ‘I hate school! I hate reading!’ When other two boys heard that they agreed about it. They started to talk about hate of school, for example, reading the books, writing the stories and so on. Finally, they said ‘I am sick of being a slave,’ Dudes, school is like a bad smell…’ They seem really do not like school. Then, three boys planed to run away from a school to the Pacific Ocean by the boat for their holidays. After few weeks, they left their town and trip to get their freedom. Then they arrived at an uninhabited island. Pele, Ron and Pete were really glad to it and enjoyed their freedom, because they do not need to writing, reading and studying. They enjoyed the freedom very much! But, they started to get tired of their freedom as it was enough for them. Suddenly, they want to quite their freedom lives and found certain bottle. Pele caught it and to get open it by himself. It was really hard to open. He gripped the cork tightly and pulled and pulled … Suddenly, three boys saw a giant genie standing over them in a cloud of smoke. He said ‘Thank you!’ because opening the bottle connected with saving a giant genie. According to his telling, he can get come true three boy’s wish. As three boys grew tired of living there, they said ‘We want to go back to school and studying!!’ And then, a giant genie got come true their wish.
Sometimes, I think that want to get a freedom. But in my opinion, too much freedom and our free time are not necessary for us. Moderate amount of them is the best for us!! I could reconfirm about it. (319 words)
Sunday, January 10, 2010
BR5:＊Shark!＊
I read ‘Shark!’. This story is separated in 3 chapters. The main characters are Matt and Corban, they are really good friends. Both boys always hang over together.
One day, they surfed with their each surf board on the sea. Then, for a moment Corban looked something and shouted ‘Hey. Matt, did you see that?’ But Matt did not see any thing. After that, they continued to ride the surf after a short time. Both boys cut to the right, left and raced down the face of the wave. Next, Matt saw something swimming in the sea when they ride the surf. Suddenly, they were worried about it what it might be shark!!! Then, it showed its tail fin to two boys. When they saw it, their fear increased more and more. And then, Corban stared closely into the sea and said ‘I do not think it is a shark because its tail fin does not stick up. Shark’s tail fins always stick up!’ Matt agreed his opinion. Then, a dolphin appeared from the water. Two boys and the dolphin enjoyed surfing together!!
If I were Matt or corban, I could not tell that is the shark or the dolphin. They experienced fear but, their knowledge helped them from the fear. (211 words)
One day, they surfed with their each surf board on the sea. Then, for a moment Corban looked something and shouted ‘Hey. Matt, did you see that?’ But Matt did not see any thing. After that, they continued to ride the surf after a short time. Both boys cut to the right, left and raced down the face of the wave. Next, Matt saw something swimming in the sea when they ride the surf. Suddenly, they were worried about it what it might be shark!!! Then, it showed its tail fin to two boys. When they saw it, their fear increased more and more. And then, Corban stared closely into the sea and said ‘I do not think it is a shark because its tail fin does not stick up. Shark’s tail fins always stick up!’ Matt agreed his opinion. Then, a dolphin appeared from the water. Two boys and the dolphin enjoyed surfing together!!
If I were Matt or corban, I could not tell that is the shark or the dolphin. They experienced fear but, their knowledge helped them from the fear. (211 words)
Thursday, January 7, 2010
Shopping and eating
I went to shopping with my friend Wakana. We have known each other when we were high school students. So, we are good friends.
She really likes shopping, so we went shopping that day, too!
First, we entered PARCO to find some clothes which we like. But I went to Fukuoka to buy some clothes with my family, and then I bought a lot of them. Unfortunately, I do not have enough money to shop any more… So I helped her when she was irresolute to buy something. When we went to certain shop, she seems to find nice clothe. It was really lovely dress!! But she also does not have enough money, so she was irresolute very much. Then, I said 'I think that you should try the dress on before you are irresolute. I do not want you to regret about it.' After she tried it on, she seems to decide to buy it after all! She could good shopping.
Then, we had dinner at the restaurant J café in the Shimo Street. J café has many kinds of dishes, drinks, deserts. In addition, J café has dinner set. We have not had it before, so we tried it. The contents of it are a salad, a cup of soup, pasta or rice dish, drink and small parfait. As you can see from some pictures, these are really good dishes. I loved all of them, but, especially, I loved pasta very much. The source was mixed tomato source and cream source. I have not had like it before, so I was really looking forward to have it before I eat. To my surprise, it was more delicious than I thought. I was really satisfied with it. If there are some friends who have never eaten it before, I want to recommend it enthusiastically.
To tell the truth, we will enjoy the BBQ party at the garden of my friend’s house with my club members. But it began to rain after we decided. So we disappointed at calling the BBQ party off. However Wakana and I could enjoy shopping and eating instead of the BBQ party. I had a great time with Wakana. (364 words)
She really likes shopping, so we went shopping that day, too!
First, we entered PARCO to find some clothes which we like. But I went to Fukuoka to buy some clothes with my family, and then I bought a lot of them. Unfortunately, I do not have enough money to shop any more… So I helped her when she was irresolute to buy something. When we went to certain shop, she seems to find nice clothe. It was really lovely dress!! But she also does not have enough money, so she was irresolute very much. Then, I said 'I think that you should try the dress on before you are irresolute. I do not want you to regret about it.' After she tried it on, she seems to decide to buy it after all! She could good shopping.
Then, we had dinner at the restaurant J café in the Shimo Street. J café has many kinds of dishes, drinks, deserts. In addition, J café has dinner set. We have not had it before, so we tried it. The contents of it are a salad, a cup of soup, pasta or rice dish, drink and small parfait. As you can see from some pictures, these are really good dishes. I loved all of them, but, especially, I loved pasta very much. The source was mixed tomato source and cream source. I have not had like it before, so I was really looking forward to have it before I eat. To my surprise, it was more delicious than I thought. I was really satisfied with it. If there are some friends who have never eaten it before, I want to recommend it enthusiastically.
To tell the truth, we will enjoy the BBQ party at the garden of my friend’s house with my club members. But it began to rain after we decided. So we disappointed at calling the BBQ party off. However Wakana and I could enjoy shopping and eating instead of the BBQ party. I had a great time with Wakana. (364 words)
If i were not me...
I imagined if I have a different national in the speaking class. I decided some conditions to think it. These are some conditions.
I am Jessica. I live in
My family has a history. My grand parents migrated to
My job is an instructor of skydive for beginners. I have been working for about 10 years. When the beginners want to do it, I usually skydive with them. I am able to get some pleasures from their smile when I work every time.
In addition, I have many hobbies. For example, taking pictures, fishing, skiing, cooking and so on. But especially, I love taking photos. I sometimes go to the beautiful places and take some pictures. To my surprise, I was prized 1st place at the big photo contest. The picture was run in the famous photo magazine. I nearly wept for joy about it. (187 words)
Wednesday, January 6, 2010
Portfolio for Writing IV (2009-10)
Student ID: 13108148
Portfolio for Writing IV, Section 1A OR 1C
(See: Note 1, below)
(See: Note 1, below)
0.0. OVERVIEW
Reviews, Posts, Words, and More
(See: Note 2, below.)1.0. ESSAYS
(See: Note 3, below.)
Please complete this table with data gathered from essays on your blog. See the Key (below) for definitions of the symbols in row one, and complete columns four through nine with numerical values (0, 1, 2, 3, ...).
Please complete this table with data gathered from essays on your blog. See the Key (below) for definitions of the symbols in row one, and complete columns four through nine with numerical values (0, 1, 2, 3, ...).
1.1. Showcase | Short titles with links to blog posts | Dates yyyy.mm.dd | ¶ | W | C | L | P | M |
| 2-01a (2009.10.07) | Essay 1a: Favorite place/ Essay | Wednesday, October 14, 2009 | 340 | 9 | 0 | 0 | 0 | |
| 2-01b (2009.10.21) | essay2-01b: My favorite place | Thursday, October 22, 2009 | 433 | 2 | 0 | 0 | 0 | |
| (2-01c) | ||||||||
| 2-02a (2009.11.04) | web review | Wednesday, October 28, 2009 | 317 | 2 | 0 | 0 | 0 | |
| 2-02b (2009.11.18) | J.K. Rowlling's success story | Monday, November 16, 2009 | 377 | 1 | 0 | 0 | 0 | |
| (2-02c) | ||||||||
| 2-03a (2009.12.02) | essay 2-03a: My language learning history | Wednesday, December 2, 2009 | 527 | 4 | 0 | 0 | 0 | |
| 2-03b (2009.12.18/22) | Essay 2-03b: My Language History | Thursday, December 17, 2009 | 532 | 0 | 0 | 0 | 0 | |
| (2-03c) | ||||||||
| Totals | --- | --- | 2526 | 18 | 0 | 0 | 0 |
Key:
¶: number of paragraphs five (5) or more sentences in length
W: number of words
C: number of comments
L: number of links
P: number of photos or other graphics
M: number of other media included in post
1.2. Most Improved Essay
(See: Note 4, below.)Selection and Assessment: Which of the three essays that you've written and revised this semester shows the most improvement? What did you do to improve it? Remember that complete answers are better than short answers, focus on your writing (accuracy, appropriacy, content and organization, rather than graphics or other media), and explain at least two major improvements.
- [Please remove these remarks, including the square brackets, then identify your most improved essay, and explain ways that you improved it here.]
2.0. COMMENTS
Showcase | Short titles of posts with links | Dates of comments yyyy.mm.dd | Numbers of words in comments | Qualities of comments** |
2.1. Your first comment on your instructor's blog* | "Social Media and Social Networking Explained" | Wed Oct 14 | 49 | I wrote about good point of SNS and also a point of we have to be careful. |
2.2. Your best comment on a classmate's blog* | Essay (2-03a): Learning languages stories | 12.01.2009 | 12 | Thing that i did not know about her. And I gave her a question. |
2.3. Best comment by a classmate on your blog* | essay 2-03a: My language learning history | Wednesday, December 2, 2009 | 13 | Question |
2.4. Most comments on: | Short titles of posts with link | Dates of posts yyyy.mm.dd | Total number of words in comments | Qualities of comments** |
2.4.1. Any one of your essays* | essay 2-03a: My language learning history | December 9, 2009 | 12 | She gave me a question about which country I want to go when I become a Japanese teacher. |
2.4.1.1. When did you respond to those comments? | --- | Thursday, December 17, 2009 | --- | --- |
2.4.1.2. How did you respond to those comments? | --- | --- | 231 | I answered each questions each other on my blog post. |
2.4.2. Any of your other posts* | essay2-01b: My favorite place | October 23, 2009 | 19 | Impressions |
2.4.2.1. When did you respond to those comments? | --- | January 14, 2010 | --- | --- |
| 2.4.2.2. How did you respond to those comments? | --- | --- | 20 | I respond her comment in the comment box. |
* Current semester comments on essays and other posts
** Please list the most important qualities of comments on each type of blog post. That is, explain briefly what makes comments good.
2.5. Recent comments display
Does your blog display recent comments from blog visitors in a prominent location, for example, in a sidebar, header, or footer widget? Where, or why not? Please explain.- Yes, it does. I set up my blog display recent comments in top of a sidebar, because that place is the easiest to find the comments from blog visitors when I want to see it.
2.6. Additional reflections on comments
● I have to respond the comments from visiters.
● I should leave more comments than now.
3.0. BOOK REVIEWS
3.1. Showcase | Short titles with links | Dates: yyyy.mm.dd | Words | Comments |
Example: | 2007.05.16 | 39 | 1 | |
BR 2-01 | Monday, September 28, 2009 | 239 | 0 | |
BR 2-02 | Monday, October 5, 2009 | 152 | 2 | |
BR 2-03 | Tuesday, December 22, 2009 | 185 | 1 | |
BR 2-04 | Saturday, January 2, 2010 | 211 | 0 | |
BR 2-05 | Sunday, January 10, 2010 | 211 | 0 | |
BR 2-06 | Tuesday, January 12, 2010 | 319 | 0 | |
BR 2-07 | Tuesday, January 12, 2010 | 239 | 0 | |
BR 2-08 | Tuesday, January 12, 2010 | 137 | 0 | |
BR 2-09 | Tuesday, January 12, 2010 | 137 | 0 | |
BR 2-10 | Thursday, January 14, 2010 | 199 | 0 | |
BR 2-11 | Thursday, January 14, 2010 | 188 | 0 | |
BR 2-12 | Thursday, January 14, 2010 | 147 | 0 | |
BR 2-13 | ||||
BR 2-14 | ||||
BR 2-15 | ||||
BR 2-16 | ||||
BR 2-17 | ||||
BR 2-18 | ||||
--- | --- | Totals: | 2364 | 3 |
Note: Please calculate and list book review Totals for words and comments without including those from the example (above).
3.2. Best Book Review
Selection and Assessment: Which of those book reviews do you feel is the best that you've written this semester, and why? Remember that a complete answer is better than a short answer, focus on your writing, and give at least two reasons to support your assessment.- I think 'BR6:1*I Wish* is the best book review of all because the story is about getting too much freedom. It makes people greedy. In the end, people are disgusted with too much freedom and people want to go back to usual life. I could reconfirm the good point of normal life. In addition, I could write my opinion about freedom and the word count is best of all. So, I select this of all book reviews.
4.0. BLOG LAYOUT, LABELING, LINKING, and MEDIA
Showcase | Yes | No |
| 4.1. Does your blog display an archive? | ○ | |
| 4.1.1. Does the archive display the titles of posts? | ○ | |
| 4.1.2. Is the archive organized by month? | ○ | |
| 4.1.3. Is the archive at or near the top of the sidebar? | ○ | |
| 4.2. Does your blog display a cloud or list of labels in the sidebar? | ○ | |
| 4.2.1. Do your labels include these required labels (typed accurately): | --- | --- |
| ○ | |
| ○ | |
| ○ | |
| ○ | |
| ○ | |
| ○ | |
| 4.2.2. Does your sidebar display other labels? | ||
| --- | --- |
--- | --- | |
| 4.3. Links and media | --- | --- |
| 4.3.1. Do your blog posts this semester include photos or other graphics? | ○ | |
| ○ | |
| --- | --- |
| 4.3.2. Does your blog include posts with multiple links? | ○ | |
| --- | --- |
| 4.3.3. Does your blog include other media? | ○ | |
| --- | --- |
| --- | --- |
| --- | --- |
4.4. Overall presentation
What have you done to enhance the overall presentation and readability of your blog? List and explain the three most important content, display, formatting, layout, or other presentation changes that you have made on your blog this semester.- I put on some photos on each blogs.
- I changed the layout of my blog. Recent comment moved to the top of the blog.
- I increased links more than last semester.
5.0. ADDITIONAL REFLECTIONS ON YOUR BLOG AND YOUR WRITING FOR IT
Please feel free to include reflections on both class work and homework, as well as on the content of this portfolio (proto-portfolios, showcases, selections, and reflections).- I did all homework.
- I wrote some blog posts with photos.
6.0. ADVICE AND SUGGESTIONS FOR YOURSELF, YOUR PEERS, AND YOUR SUCCESSORS
- I should respond comments from visitors as soon as possible.
- It was really late that beginning my work. So, I have to do it as soon as possible.
- I had to post more blogs.
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Notes:
- This portfolio template derives from Writing Studio Blog templates for Writing IIIc and Writing IVc (2007-08), Writing III, §§1a & 1c, Writing IV: Portfolio, §§1a & 1c (2008-09), and the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III.
- Please use the same code in section 0.0 that you used to embed your proto-portfolios (PPFs) in the footer of your blog, which you should already have revised to display your 2nd (fall) semester PPF first.
- The essays section (1.0. Essays, above) derived from Proto-Portfolio 2-02 (2008).
- The essay selection and explanation item (§1.2, above) differs from that in the July 7, 2009, Portfolio for Writing III. Please read the new item carefully before making a selection.
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Tuesday, January 5, 2010
Great time with my family
This is my grand father of my mother side. He lives in Takahira by himself now, because his wife is sick in bed at the hospital. January 2nd, my father, my mother and me went to his house in Takahira and had a New Year party with our relatives. The members were my grand father, my parents, and the parents of my 2 cousins. In addition, my grand mother went back her house only 1 day without a stay. I sometimes visit the hospital to meet her with my mother, but I have not seen her in her house. And I think that it was a big present for us!!!
We had really luxurious dishes and talked a lot about the things of we had experienced last year each other.
I do not have much time to meet my grand mother at the hospital. So, when she eats dished, I tried to help her to eat them as I can possible. I think that she had a great time with family. (171 words)
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